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Sami,24,suit,tall and mohammed,29,suit,tall chase zeshan between ally way and free running between building.
MOHAMMED
stop,stop now!
then the zeshan slips and they catch up with him and beat him down to the floor and kick his rips and take him to decon who asked them to bring him.
MOHAMMMED
You bastard!
SAMI
Get up now!
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They hand him to decon (boss) and there boss gives them a order to through him in a dark room tell his gang leader pay's us £50,000.
DECON
Good job lads!
SAMI
Where should we put him now?
DECON
Through him in the back dark room!
MOHAMMED
Ahhahahha yes sir!
SAMI
Yes sir!
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The kidnapper call's his gang leader and tell's him that i got one of your mans here so if u wont him you better drop the money to me in 24 hours other ways it's too late am gana kill your gang memeber.
- DECONhello? i got one of your boys here mateu want him back you got 24 hours to pay me£50,000 other ways we kill him! hang up
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The other gang leader send's his mans to shoot the kidnapper and his bodyguards and get the there gang member back without paying.
ALI
I want to go get him back shoot every boday that
comes in your way !
AHMED
Yes sir it will be done before u know it!
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The gang come to the kidnapper and start to shoot his bodyguards to get through to the boss and shoot him and save the hostage.
MOHAMMED
Shoot them pricks!
SAMI
Shouting!
MOHAMMED
Sami i just got shot
SAMI
So did i !
DECON
Sami and mohammed get your ass's here now!
DECON
DECON
Sami and mohammed get your ass's here now!
deacon realises that sami and mohammed are dead,camera freezes on the dead bodys.
Well done Sami, you have listened to me about the scene headings and added a better ending description. The dialogue is clear (if a little rude in places!) and your script has really progressed.
ReplyDeleteNext you need to work on your storyboards and your proposal.
Keep up the good work!
You also need to read back through your script and add capital letters and full stops to your sentences.
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